I love what I wrote--
I'll live under the sea
in a forest of anemones
where I can feel the ocean's gentle swells and
ride the furious waves,
where the cold of the depths balance
the heat of my heart's desire...
But I'm not happy with any of the ways I tried to incorporate them. I'm looking for help, folks! Any suggestions are welcome...
10 comments:
speach bubbles! there are a million ways to do them, and many of them beautiful.
really nice illo!
hi Karen
Love your colors and the type wrapping around the box!
Thoughts:
The poem gives me a feeling of motion - "gentle swells" and "furious waves... ." Yet the various pieces of your image appear to be botanical studies and scientific illustration ... kind of formal and stationary - is the contrast intentional?
Also - there's something murky about the "cold of the depths"; you know, like when you see underwater photography and the colors are kind of off and surreal? Maybe more color overlaying the creatures?
KJ
Love the fish and flowers. Good job! You might consider brigher colors to accent the deeper ones. :-)
It's a lovely illo.
beautiful colours.
Don't know about the words, I think I'd keep them seperate/alongside rather than actually in or on the image
I like it just the way it is. I think it is fantastic and wish you would trust yourself more on this. Put it aside and come back to it in a month and see if you don't agree.
I like the text wrapping around the edge, too. In fact, I like this whole work a lot.
Well, I really love the piece as it is. The composition and colours are just great.
Wow, the words really strike me...really beautiful. But they don't seem to compliment the images. For me I think it's the lack of movement. I need to feel the gentle swells and the furious waves...and I don't with the stationary images. Truly lovely words though.
I like it. What about it bothers you? Do you not like the way it reads? Maybe it's just a matter of changing the color shade or hue gradually and progressively from one line to the next to seperate each line. Or is it the look? Maybe just play with the white border a bit [ie. give it a slight tint]. I have a feeling that your friend Tammy Vitale might be right, though.
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